Thursday, February 24, 2011

Swimming


     The air stinks of the ocean, of the dead fish and of the decomposing plants. This doesn't bother you. You have come here with one goal in mind: to surround yourself with that gorgeous green ocean water. It has been a long wait, your mind tossing away the heavy weight of a season of snow and rain. Now, the time has come. The time for all your worries and fears to be washed away. Carefully, so as not to embarrass yourself, you remove your clothes, save for your swim garments. Ah yes, those beautifully patterned swim clothes, they've been sitting at the back of your drawer for almost a year now, eager to see some action. The time has come, laughing with your friends, drinks in hand, you make your way towards the gentle water. The hot sand burns your feet and the smell of the sea makes you cough. Upon entering the cool, refreshing water, these unpleasant sensations mean nothing anymore. It's just you, the waves, the sun, and your friends. Summertime has truly begun.

2 comments:

  1. Nice description, Wyatt. I am the grammar police here. Check for correct use of commas and semi colons. Does that sentence that starts with "but" work as well as if you had joined it with the preceding one?

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  2. Wyatt i really liked your description! i think some of your puncuation could be changed but other than that it is very descriptive! good job!!

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